Long ago, when the world was young and civilizations arose, a new kingdom was born. It was called Pehlareh. Far to the east of the high ascalonian plains, the kingdom of Pehlareh was considered the jewel of Tyria (world). The reason for that title was the powerful possession the king of Pehlarek had. It was said to be the last remaining object let by the gods on earth (not to speak of those kept in Arah). However, one day, such prized possession was destroyed by order of the king himself, for reasons unknowned. On the same year of the destruction of the secret possession, Pehlareh was attacked by the Zvans, a race of magical warriors that reduced to ashes the "Jewel of Tyria".
That was a long time ago, the world is now old and civilizations crumble, and a new evil is rising...
Tell me what you think. Should I keep making them or is this a complete waste of time? Please be nice and comment it.
The Crystal Guard
gervasium
Mr. G
My eyes, My sexy Eyes - They burn...
ok perhaps a bit dramatic - on the scale of 1-10...bout 4
ok perhaps a bit dramatic - on the scale of 1-10...bout 4
noir0
second comic is definately funnier, i like the pose you caught the rit in.
Vynn Avatar
Ok so...I know this was originally posted awhile ago, but...I think it's an awesome idea but your grammar needs a little work, the stories need a little developing and the layout needs a little polish...seriously though great idea!
FelixCarter
Good job. A bit dramatic, but good. ^_^
onerabbit
hahahaha awsome! that second 1 is brill
gervasium
Updated the first post with episode 3
Mistical miss
Nice ones gervasium 
keep the story going ^^ I like that assassin ^^
keep the story going ^^ I like that assassin ^^
pidjee
keep them coming
DrClick
I think you need to work on the actual visual appearance of the comic, Right now it looks very cut and paste. That sometimes caused me to skip a panel in reading it due to the format.
Perynne
Seconded with you needing to work on the visual appearance of the comic. I think the storyline would be brought out more if you made it easier to read.
First of all, I suggest using round speech bubbles. You can do this in Photoshop by using the circle select tool, then going to Edit -> Stroke. It will give you nice, round bubbles.
Also, please keep most of the speech bubbles inside the picture they belong to. It is VERY confusing to read it when a white speechbubble overlaps into the white background and another image that isn't even the next logical frame... it breaks the reader's concentration and makes it more confusing. With the size of page you're running at, you can even afford to make the text slightly smaller to get it all to fit. Remember that it's not a sin to have a speechbubble overlap a character, as long as it's not right in front of the face.
Yes, I know it might look cooler to have bubbles all over the place, but please, for the sake of the reader's sanity have them actually make sense. I love the idea behind this comic, it would be a shame to have it spoiled by poor use of frames and speech bubbles.
First of all, I suggest using round speech bubbles. You can do this in Photoshop by using the circle select tool, then going to Edit -> Stroke. It will give you nice, round bubbles.
Also, please keep most of the speech bubbles inside the picture they belong to. It is VERY confusing to read it when a white speechbubble overlaps into the white background and another image that isn't even the next logical frame... it breaks the reader's concentration and makes it more confusing. With the size of page you're running at, you can even afford to make the text slightly smaller to get it all to fit. Remember that it's not a sin to have a speechbubble overlap a character, as long as it's not right in front of the face. Yes, I know it might look cooler to have bubbles all over the place, but please, for the sake of the reader's sanity have them actually make sense.
I love the idea behind this comic, it would be a shame to have it spoiled by poor use of frames and speech bubbles.
gervasium
Hi again! After a few weeks without beeing able to post (/cough banned /cough) I will celebrate my return with a new style!
I took a look at the critics and decided the new episodes should have an improved look and so... here is episode 5.
By the way, I updated the introduction in the first post so it would contain a proper intro to the comics!
I took a look at the critics and decided the new episodes should have an improved look and so... here is episode 5.
By the way, I updated the introduction in the first post so it would contain a proper intro to the comics!
gervasium
13 views and no answer? C'mon, not even a single: Oh, it's crap!
Tell me what you think please. I spent 2 weeks trying to make episode 5 worth it.
Tell me what you think please. I spent 2 weeks trying to make episode 5 worth it.
Perynne
A lot better. That was clearer to read. Great job! I was laughing at the warrior a lot, since... well... that kind of behavior is very familiar. As for the father and son, the height difference was nicely done. Looking forward to seeing more.
That was clearer to read. Great job! I was laughing at the warrior a lot, since... well... that kind of behavior is very familiar. As for the father and son, the height difference was nicely done. Looking forward to seeing more.
[email protected]
Yay i get a mention 
Free Gate Opener is one of my presear characters
Free Gate Opener is one of my presear characters
gervasium
well, there were lots of people helping me on that comic. Free Gate Opener is actually an easy name to remember.
I'm now working on chapter 6, Hadiro and Xai will appear on it.
I've now noticed that in episode 5 i wrote episode 4 by mistake. Will correct it later.
I'm now working on chapter 6, Hadiro and Xai will appear on it.
I've now noticed that in episode 5 i wrote episode 4 by mistake. Will correct it later.
gervasium
After a long wait, episode 6 has arrived. Deep within the Echovald Forest, Hadiro and Xai will have their last stand...or not.
This episode also raises many doubts. What's so special about Xai's cape? Who are the Mercenaries? Who or what is Ahmi Sun? What terrible evil has Hadiro commited to make Xai decide never to forgive him? Keep watching the comics and, eventually, these questions will all be answered.
Please comment. Constructive criticism is appreciated as I feel I need to improve a lot on the comics.
(Sorry for double-post)
This episode also raises many doubts. What's so special about Xai's cape? Who are the Mercenaries? Who or what is Ahmi Sun? What terrible evil has Hadiro commited to make Xai decide never to forgive him? Keep watching the comics and, eventually, these questions will all be answered.
Please comment. Constructive criticism is appreciated as I feel I need to improve a lot on the comics.
(Sorry for double-post)
gervasium
After a long wait, episode 6 has arrived. Deep within the Echovald Forest, Hadiro and Xai will have their last stand...or not.
This episode also raises many doubts. What's so special about Xai's cape? Who are the Mercenaries? Who or what is Ahmi Sun? What terrible evil has Hadiro commited to make Xai decide never to forgive him? Keep watching the comics and, eventually, these questions will all be answered.
Please comment. Constructive criticism is appreciated as I feel I need to improve a lot on the comics.
(Sorry for double-post)
This episode also raises many doubts. What's so special about Xai's cape? Who are the Mercenaries? Who or what is Ahmi Sun? What terrible evil has Hadiro commited to make Xai decide never to forgive him? Keep watching the comics and, eventually, these questions will all be answered.
Please comment. Constructive criticism is appreciated as I feel I need to improve a lot on the comics.
(Sorry for double-post)
gervasium
After a long wait, episode 6 has arrived. Deep within the Echovald Forest, Hadiro and Xai will have their last stand...or not.
This episode also raises many doubts. What's so special about Xai's cape? Who are the Mercenaries? Who or what is Ahmi Sun? What terrible evil has Hadiro commited to make Xai decide never to forgive him? Keep watching the comics and, eventually, these questions will all be answered.
Please comment. Constructive criticism is appreciated as I feel I need to improve a lot on the comics.
(Sorry for double-post)
This episode also raises many doubts. What's so special about Xai's cape? Who are the Mercenaries? Who or what is Ahmi Sun? What terrible evil has Hadiro commited to make Xai decide never to forgive him? Keep watching the comics and, eventually, these questions will all be answered.
Please comment. Constructive criticism is appreciated as I feel I need to improve a lot on the comics.
(Sorry for double-post)
Yuca Dolitae
Its good - it has promise!
I have to agree that in the earlier comics the grammar was a little poor and at times it was hard to follow in the layout but saying that, you've clearly spent time and effort making these which imo has to be held in high esteem - you've clearly thought about where you want to take it and how each frame will look.
Also agreed that it is a little dramatic - but then again its also the hook of the strip because unless its being satirical, people aren't going to want to read about the daily lives of GW characters...we play them already!
Given time these could work out really well, good luck with them and lets see more!
(btw the little angel and devil assassins are particularly inspired!)
I have to agree that in the earlier comics the grammar was a little poor and at times it was hard to follow in the layout but saying that, you've clearly spent time and effort making these which imo has to be held in high esteem - you've clearly thought about where you want to take it and how each frame will look.
Also agreed that it is a little dramatic - but then again its also the hook of the strip because unless its being satirical, people aren't going to want to read about the daily lives of GW characters...we play them already!
Given time these could work out really well, good luck with them and lets see more!
(btw the little angel and devil assassins are particularly inspired!)
Mistical miss
Yeah loved the devil and angel assassins bit ^^, btw was firendship intended? It should be friendship.
gervasium
Gasp! "Firendship", Lol! How could I have that wrong... twice? Oh, well, even when I find the comics are perfect (so to speak), someone else always finds something to correct.
Dramatic? I don't see anything dramatic in this episode. The first episode, of course, was maybe too much dramatic but I don't see anything in the 6th.
Hadiro really did something terrible to the empire. Something that Xai could never forgive. If that's what's dramatic, it isn't. You'll find out later what evil that was.
Edit:
"You can't kill what's already dead" is a line from an undead in palawa's army.
And, sorry for posting twice the same thing a while back. I don't know how i did it!
Dramatic? I don't see anything dramatic in this episode. The first episode, of course, was maybe too much dramatic but I don't see anything in the 6th.
Hadiro really did something terrible to the empire. Something that Xai could never forgive. If that's what's dramatic, it isn't. You'll find out later what evil that was.
Edit:
"You can't kill what's already dead" is a line from an undead in palawa's army.
And, sorry for posting twice the same thing a while back. I don't know how i did it!
Gairoh
Read ur comic, it's really nice,keep them coming....like the sin and rit part the most
gervasium
After long time without comments and, after seriously considering to give up, I've finished Episode 7.
It took a great deal of work but now it's done. This episode explains the reason Hadiro and Xai hate each other and it raises some questions: What was the mysterious light? How did they survive the Jade Wind?
Hope you like it and post your thoughts and comments on the episode.
It took a great deal of work but now it's done. This episode explains the reason Hadiro and Xai hate each other and it raises some questions: What was the mysterious light? How did they survive the Jade Wind?
Hope you like it and post your thoughts and comments on the episode.
gervasium
No comment? I'm serious when I speak of giving up. I just need to look at this thread and my depressing mind comes right into action. I had a lot of work doing the last episode, and nobody saw it!!
I'm sorry for double posting but... what can I do?
Ok, yesterday, I decided to make a mini-episode about the events on Maguuma Stade last night.
For those of you who didn't understand what was going on there, I'll tell you. It happens that a lore expert(Quintus Antonious) in Gwo forums decided he wanted mursaat in GWEN, thus he decided to make a rally for mursaat rights. They decided they would meet at Maguuma Stade at the 14th April 5pm gmt. Anet heard of this rally and decided to "cooperate", making mursaat really appear in International districts, giving a "real event" feeeling to the rally.
Based on the actuall reactions of Quintus, I decided to make this mini-episode.
I'm sorry for double posting but... what can I do?
Ok, yesterday, I decided to make a mini-episode about the events on Maguuma Stade last night.
For those of you who didn't understand what was going on there, I'll tell you. It happens that a lore expert(Quintus Antonious) in Gwo forums decided he wanted mursaat in GWEN, thus he decided to make a rally for mursaat rights. They decided they would meet at Maguuma Stade at the 14th April 5pm gmt. Anet heard of this rally and decided to "cooperate", making mursaat really appear in International districts, giving a "real event" feeeling to the rally.
Based on the actuall reactions of Quintus, I decided to make this mini-episode.
Mistical miss
I can imagine your anger gervasium, sorry I didn't read it at first. I've read it now, the ending is absolutely awesome, but the meanwhile thing was stretched too long .
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nkabuto
Your comic is good. I like the way you set the camera, its like watching a movie. Keep them coming. ^_^
chembaron
I like reading screenshots turned into comic strips.