Unexpected help for Dervish Gnome against Cynn

*A female ranger steps out from the bushes* just before Cynn is going to attack, and says "stop this madness,now Cynn , youre a spoiled brat who needs to be taught a lesson about behavior" * Shoots a disrupting arrow in Cynn's butt, so she is knocked over. *Sits on Cynn* "now Cynn , calm down, you know Mhenlo only loves you , not Dervish Gnome, he just gave her a Dwayna's kiss, which is a monk spell". *Cynn starts crying and sobbing, while the ranger are speking with her* *Dervish Gnome are watching with suprised eyes on the tall ranger who sits at Cynn*

Cynn leaves the field sobbing and crying, after getting a washout from the Ranger.
The Ranger winks to Dervish Gnome and leaves the field, searching on for her beloved husband Aidan the Ranger

Whoever taught you how to write needs to be shot.

You pulled Cynn totally out of character.

I'm sorry, I'm too sickened to even give my critique on this...

wtf....................

:/

12chars....

EPIC storry imo,write on!

Very interesting(disturbing), never thought Cynn was the type to cry and that Mhenlo didn't calm her down. On the other hand, it's a little short and the grammar could use a little work.