The bandits

Ascalon, a kingdom of peace, merchants everywhere, Town and wonderful cities. Until one day. One day, a group of Bandits under the name of the Red Serphants, started killing merchants and taking thier goods. Ascalon needed to train warriors! but they were too slow. The Bandits soon raided the city of ascalon and other places like Foibles Fair. The only thing that they could do, is hope that a hero from Kryta would come...
Character
Sex: Male
Name: Bartuc
Class: Warrior/Monk
Skills: (plz start with starting skills) Frenzy, Healing signet,Orision of healing, Healing breeze
Please make your own hero

Bartuc woke up and got out of bed. He got dressed and was immedietly called up to a meeting. Wondering what it was bout, he walked there and then Duke Tardus "Bartuc!" "We need you to go over to ascalon and help them destroy the Red Serphants!"
"OK I geuss so," Bartuc said.
"We have a special transportation device for you to get there," Tardus said. Bartuc entered the teleportation device and was immedietly sent to ascalon. It looked happy and peaceful, but it wasnt. He looked around and noticed that the environment lookd more better than Kryta's. He walked around and was welcomed a warm greeting by the king.
"Hello! you must be the one from Kryta! I hope many others come, but we need your help!" Said King Adelburn. The king quickly showed Bartuc a sword. It wasnt too fancy, but, hey its just a sword. The king also gave him a shield. It was made with wood with a metal border outlining it with, of course some metal in the middle of it too. He was also given some ringmail armor, which has obviously been worn before. He put it on and the town bell went off.
"The bandits! they are attacking! quick save us!" said the king. Bartuc knew what to do.

awww cmon! y wont anyone rp with me

Simple. No one likes the storyline. And you have bad spelling and grammer bluk.

That was pretty straightforward.



But yes, storm is right my good bartuc.

You could firstly seperate some lines, instead of bunch them all up.

Good luck in your roleplaying experience Bartuc.

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Remember how in school the teachers used to make you write a rough draft, well i would consider this your rough draft. Now can anyone tell me what to do after i have my first draft. I can, you edit it, and rewrite it.