Too cliche'. It's like you're trying to be an anime or something and it's just so predictable. I'm sure you put a lot of time into this, but I think you're going to have to use better storyline than this. Having people being so emotionally involved in episode I was really disturbingly annoying. WHAT??!?! HOW CAN I SAY THIS?!?!?! DO I LIKE TO PUT EXCLAMATION MARKS AND QUESTION MARKS AND TYPE IN ALL CAPS WHEN I SPEAK?!?!?!
Seriously, do you think your mock of a show is really that good? I mean yeah, it probably took work to make the little skit you put up, but this "Exile" garbage is getting nowhere. "Oh my, there's a mark on her neck! 3 years ago my father told me about this and I may as well just be named Clashe' because that's what I am!?" Maybe my criticism is not what you are looking for, but I am trying to save people by warning them of how it's just a knockoff wannabe anime or something.
I could probably find the anime the songs are off of from the credits and start up and I'm sure it's a very similar show in many ways. Nice try, you put effort I'm sure, but if you're putting effort into something trying to be something it's not... well good luck on finding an audience that will enjoy your cheap form of entertainment.
I hope you appreciate it, I'm pretty sure you mentioned all oppinions are "GREATLy" appreciated. And me and my brother think you're a moron for lowercasing the 'y' in that. Just our oppinions.