Random Poetry

dekboi

dekboi

Frost Gate Guardian

Join Date: Jan 2006

Ireland

[DVDF]

Storm Crow i like your style of peotry, your imagery is very good and i really enjoyed reading through the thread.

Well done to all the other poets who have also posted their work in this thread.

Keep up the good work guys.

"There in the tomb drops the faint moonlight
But winds come up from the shore
they shake when the winds roar
Old bones upon the mountian shake"

- Extract from "The Black Tower"
- W.B. Yeats

My favourite poem and poet ever

fiery

fiery

Banned

Join Date: Oct 2005

maryland

InYurFace Gaming [IYF]

R/

Row Row Row Your Boat.

Leon_Ux-ixen

Leon_Ux-ixen

Krytan Explorer

Join Date: Feb 2006

America, how I dispise it...

Order Of The Mystic Phoenix

R/Mo

Heres one of the ones I did on Nightwish.com's forum.


~ ~ ~Fallen Angel~ ~ ~

My lighted way lost
My fear builds up
My heart shakes
My soul’s screams

Set my soul free
Release me from the dark
Guide me oh holy ones
Send me to my paradise

Sadistic thoughts fill my head
Devil inspired hate grips my heart
Are these feelings of the fallen angel
Or my human mind playing tricks on me

A Book lying idle and dead
The words poison to my ears
The slightest touch burns
Just drop it in a box and forget

Set my soul free
Release me from the dark
Guide me oh holy ones
Send me to my paradise

The terrors of shadows unknown to me
Demons’ gifts razors in disguise
Their promise empty like my belief in religion
I close my eyes and count to ten wishing it all away

The power of choice is mine to use
The right to chose what belief open to all
All these tools forgotten with the book in the box

Shadows wiped away, fear drained away
Heart and soul at ease
My life the way it was before my mass confusion
The answers so clear like the moon lite ocean.

Set my soul free
Release me from the dark
Guide me oh holy ones
Send me to my paradise

My life in my control again…

Set my soul free
Release me from the dark
Guide me oh holy ones
Send me to my paradise

The darkness forced away…

Set my soul free
Release me from the dark
Guide me oh holy ones
Send me to my paradise

Awaken to the rising sun, soul free, mind clear
No longer a fallen angel in my dream

Storm Crow

Storm Crow

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Jul 2005

With Vanatiel by the Lion's Arch Lighthouse, waiting for the storm with which we are accoustomed

Children of the Order [CoO] -True Heroes Fight to Keep the Balance-

Here's a freeverse I dug up from a few months ago...

Lost

Cold,
A harsh wind blows,
Even the trees shiver,
Snow falls off of the thached roof above,
Smoke billows from the old chimney,
The fire slowly flickers, and goes out,
And the clock grows still,
And time is lost...


Forever...

LOBAL 2

Ascalonian Squire

Join Date: Jul 2006

Keepers of the stars [star]

W/

wow stromcrow u judge but can't be judged lol funny....the poems are good though i was suprised but it looked alittle (ABAB) to me.

Good stuff i would like to see more

Storm Crow

Storm Crow

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Jul 2005

With Vanatiel by the Lion's Arch Lighthouse, waiting for the storm with which we are accoustomed

Children of the Order [CoO] -True Heroes Fight to Keep the Balance-

None of my poems are ABAB, they're all ABCB...

But, yes, I can be judged, it's just that the member that was judging me was essentially using huge, complicated words and sentences to say "Your stuff sucks.", and that I do not take kindly to.

Ristaron

Ristaron

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Mar 2005

Canada, eh?

Legion Of Valhalla

E/

Well if you can be judged, here's my honest assessment:

Your poems are meaningful and something I value reading, but after the second or third PAGE of four-line ABCB I have to admit I found myself doubting your ability to challenge yourself. Poetry is not merely about rhym and rhythm, and while you've captured an essense of what you mean in your many of your poems, I simply can't find the true emotion in most of them.
Perhaps that's why I have to agree with 'Sir's 'emo' assessment. To me, the whole 'emo' fad represents a false pretense for unreasonable depression. When I read your writing, I find a metaphorical truth to the words, but there is no passion I can detect aside from your apparent (and applaudable) love of telling stories.
When I can feel the emotion, your poems will turn from admirable to moving. Until then, I suggest you continue to push yourself - you can be even better.


<Edit>: And if you have an objection to my large, complicated words, then your vocabulary could use work as well. Don't shoot others down for something you haven't yet achieved.

The Primeval King

The Primeval King

Lion's Arch Merchant

Join Date: Aug 2005

Theres A Frog On My [Cape]

W/

This one came from the bottom of my heart...

Once upon a time,
Once upon a day,
Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Found a Dino who was gay.

Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Tried to flirt with the gay dino.
But no matter what she tried,
The dino was nowhere near as horny as a Rhino.

Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Cried all day long
The only thing the dino would do
Is sing to her this song

"F is for friends who do stuff together!
U is for you and me!
N is for anything at anytime at all!
Down here in the deep green... grass."

So Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Became very mad
She found a thug to beat him up
(The thug was her dad)

As soon as Dino saw the man
He broke out into a smile.
"This is the guy I have been looking for!
I've been waiting for awhile!"

As soon as Mr. Lopenscotch
Saw the Dino's face
He realized that he really was
A total and utter disgrace

Girls have cooties
Ugly booties
Nowhere near as fine
As a dino.
So they hooked up
Had some F-U-N
And Lilly Lopenscotch found her dreamy Rhino.




I hope nobody takes insult to this lol

LOBAL 2

Ascalonian Squire

Join Date: Jul 2006

Keepers of the stars [star]

W/

Quote:
Originally Posted by Ristaron
Well if you can be judged, here's my honest assessment:

Your poems are meaningful and something I value reading, but after the second or third PAGE of four-line ABCB I have to admit I found myself doubting your ability to challenge yourself. Poetry is not merely about rhym and rhythm, and while you've captured an essense of what you mean in your many of your poems, I simply can't find the true emotion in most of them.
Perhaps that's why I have to agree with 'Sir's 'emo' assessment. To me, the whole 'emo' fad represents a false pretense for unreasonable depression. When I read your writing, I find a metaphorical truth to the words, but there is no passion I can detect aside from your apparent (and applaudable) love of telling stories.
When I can feel the emotion, your poems will turn from admirable to moving. Until then, I suggest you continue to push yourself - you can be even better.


<Edit>: And if you have an objection to my large, complicated words, then your vocabulary could use work as well. Don't shoot others down for something you haven't yet achieved. I have no choice but to agree with you on the large word,no vocabulary thing....if you don't understand what someone is saying don't get pissed, pick a dictionary and find out, or their is the alternate route take 50 cents and call someone who knows....I have A hard time reading half the posts in these forums and I don't get pissed, I try to find what in the hell their talking about and some ---hole comes around and thinks the ---- had tries to hack on me....but that's life

everyone's poetry here is at the very least good and some are great...but the best poetry always come from massive amounts of emotion,weather it's hate, love, or whatever....the emotion spills out your fingers and on to the paper to create something beautiful (and yes something evil can be beautiful).....usually if you have to think about it, you shouldn't be writing it....

And that is what grabs the reader the emotion,not what they think the peom is about cuz for every person every poem is different....and they will never be able to guess what you were thinking or feeling when you wrote it....so if they try and flame your work then they have no clue as to their on emotions, or their retarded.....

LOBAL 2

Ascalonian Squire

Join Date: Jul 2006

Keepers of the stars [star]

W/

Quote:
Originally Posted by The Primeval King
This one came from the bottom of my heart...

Once upon a time,
Once upon a day,
Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Found a Dino who was gay.

Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Tried to flirt with the gay dino.
But no matter what she tried,
The dino was nowhere near as horny as a Rhino.

Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Cried all day long
The only thing the dino would do
Is sing to her this song

"F is for friends who do stuff together!
U is for you and me!
N is for anything at anytime at all!
Down here in the deep green... grass."

So Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Became very mad
She found a thug to beat him up
(The thug was her dad)

As soon as Dino saw the man
He broke out into a smile.
"This is the guy I have been looking for!
I've been waiting for awhile!"

As soon as Mr. Lopenscotch
Saw the Dino's face
He realized that he really was
A total and utter disgrace

Girls have cooties
Ugly booties
Nowhere near as fine
As a dino.
So they hooked up
Had some F-U-N
And Lilly Lopenscotch found her dreamy Rhino.




I hope nobody takes insult to this lol ROTFLMAO this is funny as hell nice bro

Canadian Bacon

Krytan Explorer

Join Date: Jan 2006

Ontario, Canada

Kingdom of Tyria [KoT]

Quote:
Originally Posted by LOBAL 2
ROTFLMAO this is funny as hell nice bro QFT, love the Spongebob allusion

Antigone

Antigone

Ascalonian Squire

Join Date: Jul 2006

South Florida

don't yell now - but i think you need to be able to take criticism better... :/

Storm Crow

Storm Crow

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Jul 2005

With Vanatiel by the Lion's Arch Lighthouse, waiting for the storm with which we are accoustomed

Children of the Order [CoO] -True Heroes Fight to Keep the Balance-

I improved a poem today, waiting for guildies to do FoW and utter boredom

Venture to the Fissure

Heroes, allies, call on me,
And what befates us we shall see,

Down in Fissure, dank and cold,
Many things we shall behold,

Shadows mean and beasts of bone,
None should venture through alone,

Come one, come all, to Temple dear,
We are with you, do not fear,

The things that lurk in shadows deep,
Nor the monsters, scary creep,

Through the Fissure, dank and cold,
What treasures shall our eyes behold?

Heroes, allies, call on me,
And what befates us we shall see.

PLEASE NOTE: AABBCC rhyme scheme, and in couplets!! I'm so proud of myself!

Sjeng

Sjeng

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Aug 2005

in my GH

Limburgse Jagers [LJ]

W/

I've always liked this Valentine's poem:

Roses are #FF0000
Violets are #0000FF,
All of my Base,
Are belong to you!

Storm Crow

Storm Crow

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Jul 2005

With Vanatiel by the Lion's Arch Lighthouse, waiting for the storm with which we are accoustomed

Children of the Order [CoO] -True Heroes Fight to Keep the Balance-

Going back to my roots after several unsuccessful attempts at something different, a poem dedicated to my girls, literally cried when I was writing this, the paper is tearstained...

Also, this is better to be heard when read simultaneously by ten women, since it is more or less something that poured out of my characters, not me.

*S*T*O*R*M*C*R*O*W*

Never forget us,
Never give up,
Always remember,
To follow your heart,

We've always loved you,
And we always will,
True love never dies,
And ours never shall,

There's strength in our numbers,
And strength in our hearts,
But more than both those,
There is strenth in us,

Strength in the spirit,
Strength in the fame,
Strength in the sisters,
And strength in the name...

Laugh at me if you want, my girls are a part of me, and if anything happened to any one of them, I'd bawl my eyes out. You can criticize me if you want, you can tell me they're just "toons" or "computer animations", but no. To me, they're much more than that. I've taken the time to give them stories, to give them a background, a history, and life. They live and breathe, they feel, see, hear, smell and taste. They are what makes me who I am today, they each represent a part of me that is individual, and each part makes it's own character.

To Garria, my rage and anger, to Varda, my internal chaos, to Alicia, my passion, to Aerily, my primal intuition, to Mierna, my compassion, to Ksaiya, my solitude, to Revvarah, my mistakes, to Bennah, my desire, to Jadyn, my sorrow, to Sikara, my revenge, and to every girl from every chapter of Guild Wars to come, I thank you, and I love every one of you.

Storm Crow

Storm Crow

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Jul 2005

With Vanatiel by the Lion's Arch Lighthouse, waiting for the storm with which we are accoustomed

Children of the Order [CoO] -True Heroes Fight to Keep the Balance-

Got bored...made a new one ><

Unheard


Another tick, another tock,
More unheard sounds from the Grandfather clock,

Another hiss, another scat,
More unheard 'Mew's from the family cat,

Another buzz, another drone,
More unheard rings of the cordless phone,

Another screech, another howl,
More unheard 'Whoo's of the Great Horned Owl

Another clash, another blunder,
More unheard booms of endless thunder,

Another growl, another whine,
More unheard 'Bark's from Clementine,

Another scream, another shout,
More unheard cries of the pain letting out,

Another beat, another breath,
One more girl, who wishes for death...

Truong

Truong

Frost Gate Guardian

Join Date: Aug 2006

Texas, USA

Guildless.

Well, mentioning Sasuke was unexpected, but overall these poems are nice.

Storm Crow

Storm Crow

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Jul 2005

With Vanatiel by the Lion's Arch Lighthouse, waiting for the storm with which we are accoustomed

Children of the Order [CoO] -True Heroes Fight to Keep the Balance-

xD! Yah, that was a phase...>< It happens occasionally. I wrote one for Naruto tonight too..I thought he was being left out...xD Now I'll have to do one for all the guys from Naruto! >< Bah.

Mr. G

Mr. G

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Jul 2006

S. Wales

Mo/Me

A poem by Mr. G

The arrow Flies,
Across the skys,
Am ready for action,

But im dead when it lands,
I lost my Shielding Hands,
To a signet of Distraction.

Enjoy
^ ^

Aggravaar

Ascalonian Squire

Join Date: Sep 2006

W/

Quote:
Originally Posted by Mr. G
A poem by Mr. G

The arrow Flies,
Across the skys,
Am ready for action,

But im dead when it lands,
I lost my Shielding Hands,
To a signet of Distraction.

Enjoy
^ ^ lol, I did.

Very nice poetry, guys, I quite enjoyed it.
Here's a bit of meta (I hope) poetry by your's truly:

The Stone Forgets

Here it is – the stone, washed
by rain, tormented
by wind, charred
by our love of words.
And there she stands
miss beauty, teasing
till we burn, mocking
till we blush, laughing
till we laugh back
at ourselves
the wench
And there he sits
mister big truth, biting
where it hurts, scratching
till we bleed, howling
to wake us
the bastard that he is

Almost makes us feel good
when
tormented by wind
washed by rain
and charred by our hate
of life
the words fade
and the stone forgets

Storm Crow

Storm Crow

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Jul 2005

With Vanatiel by the Lion's Arch Lighthouse, waiting for the storm with which we are accoustomed

Children of the Order [CoO] -True Heroes Fight to Keep the Balance-

Another poem, dedicated to my girls...

Forgotten


The break of the pencil, the fade of the pen,
As slowly, the storyline dies once again,

The slurred dialogue, and the fuzzy landscape,
As your world collapses, there shall be no escape,

The death of the character, the tear of the page,
Forgetting the words of Mierna the Sage.

To proceed with caution, to heed all the signs,
Destroying the contracts with your own blood you've signed,

To die without pleasure, to kill with the blade,
To slay with a party, helped along in your crusade,

To not lust for his blood, to not delve ever deeper,
Forgetting the lessons of Ksaiya the Reaper.

As the cold water rushes, and the flame's licks' grow higher,
As the air becomes thin, and the earth grows so dire,

As the elements clash, never to find one triumphal,
As another spell's forgotten, tossed back in a crumple,

The breaking of spirit at the coming of age,
Forgetting the sacrifice of Alicia the Mage.

The weight of the ethereal, the ache of the passed,
The fathers discouraged, and the mothers back sassed,

The burn of chimera, as your dreams turn against you,
The sting of illusion, as your pain starts anew,

The roar of the women, as they buy in vogue,
Forgetting the anarchy of Varda the Rogue.

To take life without reason, to bloody your blade,
To go into a frenzy, as your training fades,

To pass without valor, fall upon your own steel,
As you plunge into pain, remembering to feel,

To go without reason, far into the light,
Forgetting the nerve of Garria the Knight.


Listen to nature, and learn from her past,
When need is pressing, you'd better run fast,

To speak without thought, is to shoot without aim,
Just because you can kill, doesn’t mean you'll earn fame,

Don’t get yourself lost, as you walk ever further,
Forgetting the knowledge of Aerily the Hunter.

To walk not in silence, to hide not in shadow,
To take aim at your target, while wielding a bow,

To not kill in one strike, to not torture your prey,
To remember the game, but not how you played,

To ruin the fun, to not lie to the haggler,
Forgetting the deception of Revvarah the Dagger.

The call of the Underworld, the wail of the dead,
The longing of Death to once again be fed,

The scream of the doomed, the pooling of blood,
As yet another life is nipped in the bud,

You are called now, if only to hinder,
Forgetting the chain of Bennah the Soulbinder.

The cry of a child as he scrapes his knee,
As a mother runs to rescue her baby,

She rocks him gently, and gives him a hug,
Though accidental, he's a gift from above,

She only wishes to keep him from danger,
Forgetting the reprisal of Sikara the Avenger.

The fluffy white clouds, the bright baby blue sky,
As you look into them, wishing you could fly,

There is someone, wishing they were like you,
Far up above, starting her life anew,

But you just ignore it, as your friends laugh,
Forgetting the pain of Jadyn the Seraph.

| Words | Lessons | Sacrifice | Anarchy | Nerve | Knowledge | Deception | Chain | Reprisal | Pain |

ownage of teh elite

ownage of teh elite

Lion's Arch Merchant

Join Date: Jun 2005

Paradise =)

N/Me

Hey guys this is Vantie...

Can't sleep right now...it's 12:10

So I'm gonna write some poetry and eat these oreos here.

Anyways....here we go..just some random stuff that comes to mind.



=========

Out in the world, behind a different veil of reality
Turbulence emenating from duality
Two states of mind along with two contrasting realms
In the second I wield a helm

One state of mind: The outer appearance
Finishing homework, and awaiting deliverance
For who knows when our time will come?
Only time can tell

Another state of mind: The inner immortal
The perfect haven, the gateway or portal
Choose which word you wish, but it all means the same
My perfect little haven is just a game

So now I leave you to justify
What these worlds mean to you
I know you'll probably try
But honestly, there is no truth

Choose which ever one, then live your own perfect lie
Continue lying, 'till the day that you die.

Ice Warrior Marth

Ice Warrior Marth

Pre-Searing Cadet

Join Date: Feb 2006

Arizona

OOTD

W/Mo

Lionheart

The pine trees sway gently in the cold, winter breeze
And the desolate clouds above are not meant to please
The withered rocks tell of a lost age
And the land is scared with uncertain rage

Rage that raises its fist against all that is honorable and justified
Rage that seeks to destroy in order to create another cry
This rage is a product of fear
Fear of those sacred few ever so near

And so, with sword in hand
The boy with the scared face seeks to purge the land
To purge the land of all those who threaten liberty
And those who defy His Majesty

Yet, his heart is weak with doubt
As he just wanted to shout
Meddled in his own lost emotions
He yearns to find resolution

Storm Crow

Storm Crow

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Jul 2005

With Vanatiel by the Lion's Arch Lighthouse, waiting for the storm with which we are accoustomed

Children of the Order [CoO] -True Heroes Fight to Keep the Balance-

ooOOooooo....POEM! YAY!

Awesome metaphors, Van! I wuvvs it! And I'll be in said "little haven" later tonight...maybe....I dunno...8ish? ^^ Wuv Yuu!

ownage of teh elite

ownage of teh elite

Lion's Arch Merchant

Join Date: Jun 2005

Paradise =)

N/Me

Argh why do I have to live in a different time zone?!

-=Yuki=-

-=Yuki=-

Ascalonian Squire

Join Date: Oct 2006

E/Mo

Not one of my newest poems (actually it became a song) but I still like it.

Crying Marble

Everything I’ve ruined
Everything I fixed
Everything I gave up
And everyone who’s pissed
All the things I’ve tried and
The restless nights I spent
Everything that happened
It leaves me cold and bent

Crying Marble
Crying Marble

All that I created
All that I took and gave
I’m lying here frustrated
In my self-shoveled grave
It’s carved into my body
It’s cut into my skin
I’m here and I’m nobody
My blood is getting thin.

Crying Marble
Crying Marble
Dying Marble.

jezzer1189

Frost Gate Guardian

Join Date: Jul 2006

Arrise From Flames [AFF]

W/

thats a really nice poem, took a while for me to understand it but thats cause im slow well done! A grade

heres one of mine:

Oh how his eyes lit up like stars,
Upon the skin of broken scars.
His love was too good to believe,
Sometimes he would just leave.

Upon his evil it’s hard to take,
His heart would just crumble and break.
Too much torture for me to see,
Sometimes he would just kiss me.

He worked to hard for a prize,
His councillors would just rise.
Oh the tempts of his lust,
His iron heart starts to rust.

In my heart it says to forgive,
Although the Jews tried to outlive.
Over six million gone in peril,
All in my husbands joyful Merrill.

I Apoligise if this has offended people but its a poem which has made many people think and reflect on what has happened in history and is one which i think deserves to be shown, once again im sorry if ive caused any damage to people but i've learnt alot about this cause which is y its how it is. its not aimed at any race but is written from the eyes of Hitlers wife through the way she could of seen him at the end, if it offends anyone then i will agree with it being removed to prevent more damage

please place comments about this whether you like it or not and if it offends u as i would really like the feedback

Sol_Vie

Sol_Vie

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Aug 2005

Boston, MA

Blood Of Orr [BoO]

I wrote this just now. I've been writing for years, but have never thought to post them to Guru. I might actually get someone to respond to one of my pieces! Anyway, enjoy Mist.

Swirling, twirling
Downward spiral
Lose an inch if you run a mile.

Gasping, groping
Drowning mind
The world's too mean to be so kind.

It's a missing synapse,
A broken fuse,
A faulty switch,
A clouded muse.

But knowing that does what for me?
A brilliant light, wrapped in thick, black sheets.

A shaking hand, a chaotic mind
Turns the wheel, grinds the rind.

A quickened breath, and wide open eyes
Fuels the fire to cauterize.

I need a rope, I need a clue.
I need a hand, I need a shoe.
I need a knife, I need a lieu.

It's not the same as it used to be,
This twisted mind, I give to thee.

jezzer1189

Frost Gate Guardian

Join Date: Jul 2006

Arrise From Flames [AFF]

W/

thats a amazing poem, and much better than mine, and im not just saying that, I WANT MORE!!! MORE OF THEM!!! serously post them all, if thats that good i want to see the rest of yours, ive been writing mine for 4yrs but none are that good well done i bow my best char to your poem

Sol_Vie

Sol_Vie

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Aug 2005

Boston, MA

Blood Of Orr [BoO]

Hehe that's quite a compliment. Thank you. I'll post another as well as my MySpace and Fictionpress.com links so that you can look up more if you like.

Here's one called "A New Journey Begins From You (Always)" A few of my poems are very short, this being one of them. I'll post some more at some point. I have more saved on my computer up at school. Enjoy:

Oh sweet irony,
How bitter is thine taste.
Like the Communion,
Best swallowed with blood
And with one's watered down pride.


FictionPress.com

MySpace (check the blogs)

Edit: I should mention that very few of my poems rhyme. The one from last night is a rarity in that it has a consistent rhyme scheme (sort of) and that it rhymes at all.

jezzer1189

Frost Gate Guardian

Join Date: Jul 2006

Arrise From Flames [AFF]

W/

A Soldiers Thought

I stroll through my life wondering why,
What I was and what will I be?
How can I live when will I die?
What role in this world was given to me?

A world of cruelty depression hate.
Where war surrounds us bringing us death.
Where no peace will determine our fate.
Where intoxicating gas strangles our breath.

If there is tranquillity, where could it be?
Somewhere in this world? could it be true?
In oceans in mountains, blue rivers or sea?
Where ever it is what can it do?

In a war based life we want to be free.
A soldier of war so sure to die.
When falling to earth I see part of me.
A place of peace and tranquillity can lie.

and another

A new child is born

First you were there,
Then you were gone.
Silent as a bear,
From where you belong.

Creeping through the night,
Through the soft grass.
Keeping out of sight,
Slowly the night goes past.

With a keen eye,
Searching for a new day.
The time passes by,
For the new spring of May.

As a new day will start,
And the light begins to form,
Other animals wake at heart,
A new child is born.

TheRabbitLord

Ascalonian Squire

Join Date: Oct 2006

FL

Ocarina of Time Vs. Windwaker

N/Mo

ok first thing, your a little lier if you are who i thinkyou are. that "caged bird" poem was done by someone explaining themes from "Iknow why the Caged Bird Sings" by Lois Lowry. so dont go sayin its your freakin poem if its out of a magazine. im fine if you give the actual author credit but sayin its your own poem is just wrong

Timeless Logic

Timeless Logic

Academy Page

Join Date: Jun 2005

Behind you.

The Way Of Zerthimon (TWOZ)

I wrote this in response to a tragedy that occurred early this past September. A good friend of mine committed suicide by jumping from a 15th-floor window. This poem may be difficult to follow, but I can't think of a piece better suited to express some of my deepest feelings. For the record, the alliteration wasn't intentional. I refrained from editing out the repetition because if it surfaced of its own accord, it must serve a purpose.

Finality
Tranquility
Passive solitude
The elusive objects of your search.
Faces fuse with footprints while free souls watch from wings of angels
Desperate, penitent
As they fall.
Your breath’s caress a final counsel,
The world advances without remorse.

Storm Crow

Storm Crow

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Jul 2005

With Vanatiel by the Lion's Arch Lighthouse, waiting for the storm with which we are accoustomed

Children of the Order [CoO] -True Heroes Fight to Keep the Balance-

Quote:
Originally Posted by TheRabbitLord
ok first thing, your a little lier if you are who i thinkyou are. that "caged bird" poem was done by someone explaining themes from "Iknow why the Caged Bird Sings" by Lois Lowry. so dont go sayin its your freakin poem if its out of a magazine. im fine if you give the actual author credit but sayin its your own poem is just wrong Wow, and I thought that I was a flamer...

You have no right to say that my poem is plagorized by any means without the evidence to back it up. Were you standing next to me when I was writing it? No. I was sitting at home alone at the time. Do you have any sort of evidence whatsoever of my 'plagorism', besides that you read a poem in a magazine that sounded a bit like it? No. I wrote this poem by my own hand, with a bit of inspiration from a picture I found while randomly searching Photobucket one day, besides the fact that I don't have a subscription to any magazines, no do I read them period. Give me a respectable quote from this magazine you speak of, and the issue number, and maybe your story will have some sort of validity, otherwise, try again.

Though on a happier note, I must applaud the recent additions to this thread. Very, very nice poems, guys! Much better than my novice rhyme and interpretation of theme!

jezzer1189

Frost Gate Guardian

Join Date: Jul 2006

Arrise From Flames [AFF]

W/

WHO CARES! its still a poem, if i could of been bothered then i would of put my favourite poem on "Daffodils" this thread shouldnt just be for poems we've made we should be able to use it to show to the world what we like in poems. im backing storm crow on this as this is a area of freedom does it matter where he got his inspiration from, even if it was from the "magazine" of yours, a poem poem of mine had inspiration from a article ive read and even poems ive read (well only one of them) its not on here yet but its still a poem nomatter what free will roams here if its a poem i say place it, reference it if its not yours but theres no need to reference it if its from an inspiration from a article someones read. nomatter where theyre from they should be allowed to be placed here

TheRabbitLord

Ascalonian Squire

Join Date: Oct 2006

FL

Ocarina of Time Vs. Windwaker

N/Mo

Woops my bad, poem was done by Anglelou something lois lowery was the giver author.. but still it is plagerized. . . otherwize a lot of your guys poetry is farly good

TheRabbitLord

Ascalonian Squire

Join Date: Oct 2006

FL

Ocarina of Time Vs. Windwaker

N/Mo

Lmao stop pretending you wrote it u may have changed a few words i couldnt find like a guy said before but it was not your freaking idea. I had to do an essay in english on that poem i know it wasnt yours.

Storm Crow

Storm Crow

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Jul 2005

With Vanatiel by the Lion's Arch Lighthouse, waiting for the storm with which we are accoustomed

Children of the Order [CoO] -True Heroes Fight to Keep the Balance-

I don't care what you had to do for your English class, but I did NOT plagorize ANYTHING I've ever written. Just because I came up with the same thing Maya Angelou did, does not mean that I copied it. Sure we may have used the same first line, but I did not know that there was such a poem before I googled it the last time someone accused me of plagorism. And to prove my point, I will quote stanza 3 of Sympathy By Maya Angelou

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Originally Posted by Maya Angelou: Sympathy (Source: Wikipedia - The Free Encyclopedia)
I know why the caged birds sings, ah me,
When his wing is bruised and his bosom sore,
When he beats his bars and would be free;
It is not a carol of joy or glee,
But a prayer that he sends from his heart's deep core,
But a plea, that upward to Heaven he flings -
I know why the caged bird sings.
And, Caged Bird

Quote: Originally Posted by Storm Crow
And now I know,
Why the caged bird sings,
Unable to fly,
Or stretch his wings,

And as I sit here,
Caged, alone,
With nothing,
To call my own,

The time rolls on,
Without delay,
I wish I might,
I wish I may,

Break from these chains,
To fly again,
But time goes on,
And numbs the pain.

And yet the chains,
Refuse to break,
And will still be here,
When I wake,

From shortened slumber,
Hastened breath,
But it does not come,
My friend, of Death Mine is an Emo poem, and nothing like Sympathy, except for the first stanza.

Stick that in your juice box and suck it.

Timeless Logic

Timeless Logic

Academy Page

Join Date: Jun 2005

Behind you.

The Way Of Zerthimon (TWOZ)

This is just something I drafted into the text box. Spur-of-the-moment poetry, as I rarely rhyme in my work.

Feeling jaded
Fortune faded
Life debated in your sorrow.
Pain always passes
But to the masses
It feels as endless as tomorrow.
Weightless, floating
There is no voting
Still, your opinions they may borrow.
Time was alotted
Your mind has rotted
No turning back before
Awaken.

Storm Crow

Storm Crow

Desert Nomad

Join Date: Jul 2005

With Vanatiel by the Lion's Arch Lighthouse, waiting for the storm with which we are accoustomed

Children of the Order [CoO] -True Heroes Fight to Keep the Balance-

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Originally Posted by Platinum Agent
Storm, you never fail to amaze me with your intelligence in matters like this... Why, I'm flattered. Thank you!