Screenshot: Tyrias Next Top Superstar - Completed

been funny all morning now... *must-stop-grinning-like-a-madman* not sending anything though, you never know what my sick brain might still come up with

good luck to all for this!
and thanks for all the sideline support and cheering even though we haven't properly started yet!

Weeeee, challenging me already.I already have my idea...I hope it is funny :/ Sort of hard to show both characters fully but I can get half the face in. Ahh, I hope it is funny...

Morag, your paragon looks really nice..

Good luck all!

~Prof.

Wow, can't believe I made it! One thing though - any chance of correcting the typo on my character's name? She's Tasha Darke, not Tasha Drake.... probably was my typo on my eagerness to apply!

I'm already trying to think up what to do for my photos (guess what I'm doing tonight ), guess thats my afternoon of coding out the window.

Good Luck everyone ^^

That I can do. I had copied the names exactly as in peoples applications. :P

Thank you so much Already got an idea what to do, can't wait to see what everyone else comes up with!

Aaaah, so hard! I'm usually not a funny person, except by accident. Horror, black humor and drama are more my kind of thing.

Still, I do like to laugh, so I can't wait to see what other people have come up with! And of course, I'll try my best. :3

This is so hard! I've been trying to come up with ideas all day. Ah, I fail at humour ;;
I have to ask - how literal are the requirements of 'conflict' and 'downfall'? Is it just a paraphrasing of setup-development-punchline? Or does there have to be actual conflict? Could it be 'discussion' and 'joke' instead, as long as the other character is the subject of the joke? Do I have to give come-uppance to someone Ashling doesn't like (I think Ashling likes everyone! ), or can I just make a little fun of someone or something?
I think what I mean is, are we basically being asked for three panels, with two characters interacting, ending with a joke of some sort?
Or is it more specific than this?

Also...
This confused me I'm probably just being stupid. Does this mean it has to be Female One - ie Ashling - who is embarrassed by the final joke, or is she to be the one making the joke, or finding amusement in, the other character?

Sorry for all the questions, I don't want to get it wrong

Hello Ashling. That was basically just an example of something you could do. it was put there to clarify what exactly we wanted.

If you notice at the end of the post it says:


It can be about anything you wish, it just has to be comical/amusing/make us laugh, yet still keep a professional aura around you.

Note: Make sure, if you use anyone els that is a "real" person, to mention them in your assignment submission in the email, otherwise, it would be breaking a rule, that everyone agreed too.

Ah, thank you so much, Stalker! That's really cleared things up
*gets back to working on ideas*

maybe take a look through the funnies in ur newspaper they are the best at getting a basic expressions and quick punchlines in very few pictures and are usually pretty good to relate to such as peanuts with snoopy etc~ just a suggestion *goes back into box*

Lol Tasha, that would explain why i couldnt add you when I went round adding you all to my friends list ^^ the same thing happened to Gold Lucile

Anyway..... *runs back into guild wars to take more screenies*

Just so you know, my char's name is Heavenly Messanger, not Heavenly Messenger. There is a Heavenly Messenger, so don't get us confused :P.

Still working crazily on the assignment; work is scheduling me for all the hours that i normally play :d.

Well, looking forward to meeting all of you ladies ^_^.

Btw...i'm in GMT -8, so i hope a get-together won't be too hard :x

*jams on shift+prnt scrn a bazillion times*

also, a quick q: does fraps automatically remove the interface?

Fraps displays anything thats on the screen. "ctrl shift H" will remove the whole interface so you can freely take screens and or video.

well thank you

geez, I'm so glad I already did a version of the assignment on monday cuz my computer broke down tuesday morning [] and I haven't got any GW (yet)... hope it will come back to me soon - I AM however able to send all the required screenshots before friday, thank goodness.

wee, looking forward to seeing all the other entries (and hopefully laughing about them )! gl girls!

I really hope mine is funny to the judges. Please have my type of sense of humor . Can't wait to see all of your shots, gl.

I too am not a very funny person <_<. Finally sent in the assignment though (after going through lots of overly-cheesy not funny at all ideas). Heh already a challenge, but who knows maybe the next genre types will be a little easier on my serious sue. Good luck to everyone! I can't wait to see what you guys have.

I think I've finally settled on my pictures :s
Been agonising over what to choose the last few days - What little sense of humour I have is kind of dry and... random - I hope other people will find it amusing
Now I just have to gather together the courage to send it in!

I have been agonizing over this too! you are not alone! I so appreciate those who have a witty mind and can easily determine what others find funny vs. what they themselves find funny... yes, it will take courage to submit this one....moreso, I feel, than the entry shot >.<
/gets back to work on submission

anyone else reviewing what they are trying to do in their sleep? talk about subconcious overload!

Believe it or not, but making the assignment was harder then it is to actually do. :P

I've gotten a bit over half turned in thus far, remember to those waiting for the last minute, this ends Friday (tommarow) at 11:59 PM GMT -5.

i'm nervouuss.. work took all my time to take screenies, so i had to shove it into 2 short nights : (

well, not really... I mean due to my computer breakdown I had the chance of doing only one version, and I like it, so that's it. no point agonizing over whether you could have done it better or not, cuz re-working the same thing over and over again does (at least in my opinion) not necessarily produce better results. personally, I trust my guts, and once I've settled for something, I stick to it. the rest is in the hands of someone else.. but then, I guess I'm lucky cuz I never really suffered from nerves

yeah, i did mine on Monday and have resisted the urge to change it. Perhaps a costly mistake? haha, only the sparrows know....

I got my pictures done yesterday, now I'm just all nervous about how to write the text (I've a serious writing aversion, it's the only reason I never went to uni ;_.

Must get home to hand in pixxars and play gwennnnnn~~

I tried to fight the urge to change it. I got my idea on the day teh assignment was given and took some pictures that night. Then I think on Wed. I did a couple more pictures and then started writing it. I try not to stress over these things even though i'm still slightly nervous. Then after I sent it in I got a great idea and was angry i didn't think of it before but then I realized I wasn't able to do it anyway because Death Defyer hasn't gotten through Nightfall anyway.

Anyway! I'm not incredibly confident in what I sent in but I thought it was funny and that's what I put my judgment on. So yea, Good Luck all of your again!!! For the first assignment I thought this was scary hard already!

Huh, just sent in mine. I've been sick all week and it's been a pain to come up with something funny with my head all stuffy. I hope it's funny enough! Can't wait to see everyone else's finished pictures when they're posted up.

I have a very big problem...
I found my emotes, scenery, and text. It's all perfect from this side.
But my partner must be a male char with a melandru stalker and I can't find any... I wasn't home for two days so I couldn't screen.
Can I reroll a char in the presear, so I have more chances to find one ?

'Kay forget it, I just found my guy and took the pictures
Pet-oriented pics are so hard to do...

You could, or you could ask a friend to make that male character for you.

Talk about waiting to the last minute...
<--procrastiator :d

So, Did you want 3 individual pictures or all combined into 1?

And just to be the first pessimist, i'm probably the least funny, all i can get out of my own joke is a "lol". *cries* lol. oh well, at least i got in the top 12.

well, gl ladies!

Aww, I knew I forgot something...
My partner's name is Last Dark Ranger.

ZOMG I woke up today with no internet! It was horrible!!!!!!!!!!!!! >.<

Worked on my assignment till 1:30am and was going to tweak today till deadline on the writing but I just sent Stalker something to at least MAKE it on time in case my internet freaks again... >.<

Stalker I sent you 3 emails, one with a comic layout, next w/ 3 cropped shots, and last with the 3 screenshots...hope u get them!!!!!!!!!

Man talk about nervous, forget the funny - I just want to at least get my submission in - eeeek!

By the way...hope u guys and the judges know who Michael Vick and Cher are!

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cher
http://www.cherworld.com/


Falcons' Michael Vick Indicted In Dogfighting Case
Star QB Alleged to Have Been Highly Involved
http://www.washingtonpost.com/wp-dyn...071701393.html

wow, you are really prepared.

Note: Results shall be posted later today. I apologize for the longer wait, but expect results today!!!

Well, here we have our first assignment finished. Now all we need, is for the judges comments, and then later, the rulings.

Note: All submissions will be posted as thumbnails, for the images are to large to display when merged together.

Here are the submissions, in no particular order.

Alicendre Draetha



Picture 1
Ali : But, that beautiful stalker ! Why did you make it flee ?
Guy : This way we're together. So, what's your name, baby ?

Picture 2
Ali : I'm Alicendre Draetha, I'm 21 years old, I have a little sister that's called Sarah I live in Elona I have a little kitty I love dancing, also I want lots of children and I want a religious wedding and I wanna know all your friends so I can talk with you when you invite them and when you finish at work and--
Guy : Stop it, women ! Please ! I can't bear all the talking anymore !

Picture 3
Ali :
Guy : *fleeing*
Ali : And that's how I make stalkers flee.

Judge Comments:

Judge One: In order to make someone else laugh you must laugh at yourself, and boy did you laugh at yourself here. Great way to use a character's weakness to an advantage. I think it was great that you used yourself as the punchline rather than someone else. The dialogue was great but the posing could of used a little more work, like the second screen could of used a different part of /taunt or something else to show that she was going to tell her life story. The pose you have almost takes away from "airhead" talk-a-thon you have going on. Other than that, great work!

Judge Two: A religious wedding? Are you ever going to be able to stop talking enough for at least 3 minutes to at least let the ceremony start? hehe. The dialogue was amusing, but the shots could have been much much better. I also feel that a different armor choice could have set your character out more from the background. Also, in the last shot, the quest for those NPC's that follow you around seem to be a bit distracting. It may have been better off without that quest, less movement going on in the last shot maybe?

Judge Three: I felt out of ALL the contestants, you had the best writing. Just the wordplay on Stalker was brilliant and was definitely very creative. The irony was great, the punchline was SO great, and overall, I had the biggest laugh from your scene. However, your pictures can still improve. In your first shot, I feel you should have had a shown your character more, because Alice is the "Star" after all. You could have still waited till the Stalker walked away from you, you just needed to re position yourself where Alice would have been more visible. In the 2nd shot, the arm blocking your head is really bothering me, only because it looks like the ranger is carrying you by the head (his position near the camera also makes him look bigger). The 3rd shot has a good angle, and I agree with you that watching the Stalker flee would have created the biggest impact in relevance to your lines. However, in that shot, the ranger is just too far off, and I'm busy looking for him amongst the NPC's. Overall, SUPERB writing. I hope to see your pictures improve!


Ashling Fey



PANEL 1:
Kayenne - Okay Ashling, you go restore. I need you to take the left hand gate - I'll take the right - Don't let anything through!
Ashling - Yes, Sir!

PANEL 2:
Kayenne - Make sure you keep an eye on the king, and if the other side is in trouble... Ashling... Ashling, are you listening to me?

PANEL 3:
Ashling - Are we wearing the same skirt?

Judges Comments:

Judge One: Oh silly Rits. Very very fun and cute, which only made me chuckle from the actual story. The first scene could of used more action in it, maybe making Ashling /salute to get the idea that she is being instructed. Maybe a little too simple to actually get a real good laugh from, but you passed the assignment by making it funny.

Judge Two:This by far is the cutesie funny submission that I've seen. A girl who isn't really paying attention to what shes supposed to be doing, instead worrying about things that don't pertain to the current subject. Very creative, and funny.

Judge Three:I'll be honest and say that I didn't find this scene particularly funny, but since humor is mostly subjective anyway, I must say its execution was great (which is just as important as the idea itself). I am VERY glad you had a punchline for the last shot, it really makes the story much clearer. Your pictures are also decent, with a range of good to bad shots. The 1st shot is great, the confident pose Ashlee has, the back of Kayenne, everything works. The 2nd shot also works, but in the 3rd, the background is just too plain and Kayenne (because of height and positioning) upstages Ashlee. With that said, overall, I feel you were loyal to the assignment's needs and produced a good product! Not to say you shouldn't be creative and surprise us judges!

Sali Su



Caption One:
Sali Su - Oh Pheonixy we're such a great team! Nothing's ever gonna come between us!
Pheonixy - I love you Sali Su!

Caption Two:
Sali Su - Hmmm, but with Eye of the North approaching, and me being currently broke, I can foresee money being rather tight if I want to buy all that new Armour..... How does one make a quick bit of gold these days?.....
Pheonixy - huh?

Caption Three:
Sali Su - Thanks for the 200 gold Mr Animal Tamer Sir! *to self* hehe, what a steal!
Pheonixy - .... I hate you Sali Su....

Judges Comments:

Judge One:You need to realize that if you want to be a star, you need to stand out from the others. Especially your surroundings. Your armor is just too dark and its hard to tell where hair is gloves, or shoes. It almost looks likes omitted from the picture. Other than that its a cute idea, although cruel, that you would sell your pet for money, lawl. It only made me giggle, and I was wondering where the funny was that we saw in your application.

Judge Two:I felt that the Phoenix in all of these shots overpowered your character itself. I had expected more funny, like in your applications, but I guess you can't always be funny the same. It is important to make yourself the main focus of a shot to the best of your abilities. With these shots, you are very minuscule compared to other objects in the shot.

Judge Three:Haha, I can totally see this being a comic strip. The story works well, and everything fits perfectly in the intro/conflict/resolution format. However, your pictures could have worked better. The 1st shot is understandable, but the Phoenix nearly upstages you. The 2nd shot is the exact same as the 1st, and that really disappointed me. Your lines show that you are questioning your situation... so I felt /ponder was a no brainer. Lastly for the 3rd shot, the Phoenix just looks passive. If you positioned the Phoenix (or wait till it moves into position) where it's back is facing you... I felt it would have emphasized the "I hate you Sali Su" line. Overall, not a bad start!

Sue Aside



Introduction:
Sue Aside: *hic* Gosh...I'm so lucky, your so handsome. *hic*

Conflict:
Prince Rurik: As a boy I spent much time in these lands.
Sue Aside: Rurik?!?

Punchline/Conclusion:
Prince Rurik: It sickens me to share the same air with these foul creatures.
Sue Aside: You're telling me...

Judge One:xD! You did a great job with this first assignment. You had me laughing by the second photo. I love your use of the drunken effect in the first picture which really help me and others figure out where you were going. I love that you not only used Rurik but you actually used is quotes from the game which helped your comedy scene even more. Simple and funny! Great job!

Judge Two:I was LOL'ing after the 3rd caption+image. It reminds me of every time I do that mission, how I type in chat to tell Rurik to shut up, but the ...... well....he never listens.
The drunk effect adds a lot to the scene, and I really hope your Mesmer got out of there alive! (away from the blabbering Rurik of course)

Judge Three:Your drunk effect was great!! Creativity points for that, girl! I also enjoyed Rurik's character and his infamous lines he churns out constantly. The story was great, the pictures were exceptional (great scenery, great poses, great use of angles). The humor was short, clear and effective. You basically nailed this assignment.

Death Defyer



Caption 1:
Death Defyer:Ahh where the heck is the Armor guy!
All Chat: Hey does anyone know where the Armor guy is??
No One Hears You
Death Defyer:Oh yea, maybe one of the NPC's can tell me where everything is. Hmm, which NPC? Er...maybe this cute little girl can help me. Little girl..? You there?

Caption 2:
Death Defyer:Uh...little girl! Little girl please answer, I just want to know where the armor person is! Look at me, I still have these horrible Ascalon clothes, please! Why are you ignoring me! Hello! Little girl, I am right behind you. Please just answer me! Ugh...it's not even worth it.

Caption 3:
*So-called little girl turns around*
Death Defyer: AHHH! Oh my god! Ahh, your no little girl! What happened to your face?
Elder Rhea (little girl): Child, stop-it's-I am no little-(blocked out by screams of terror)
Death Defyer: Ahh, get away from me! Your face...is so..*runs away*
Elder Rhea: It's me Elder Rhea! Stop child! Why does this keep happening to me!
Death DefyerA few meters away) Oh..my..what was that thing! That was no little girl! Ugh, and I still don't have my armor.
Elder Rhea: (practically crying) Eh, she was a stupid Kurzick anyway.

Judges Comments:

Judge One:Your captions were really long for each picture. Shortening them down to one to two sentences would of helped rather than have captions that could fit three pictures and use it for one. I really hate the lightening in Cavalon but you worked with what you got, I wish I could of seen more of your face. Your poses worked well with the general idea of each caption, especially the second picture worked really well. I didn't laugh at all, because there was too many lines that I caught up with reading rather than laughing.

Judge Two:There was to much in the script. I had to go back and forth between the pictures, and the text to have it make any sense to me at all. By then, I didn't really find it amusing if I had to keep doing that. Bigger isn't always better.

Judge Three:Like most jokes, the shorter the better. Most of the time there is a buildup of the essential information (like in most jokes with brunettes/blonde's/redheads) and I felt you went overboard with the buildup. I analyzed the text you provided, and you could have easily cut down half of the lines, and could have created a punchline. However, looking at the pictures, your poses do reflect the lines so I commend you for that. And the humor truly was there, just the execution was too winded.

Tasha Darke




Caption One:

On the set of Tyria’s Next Top Superstar:

Tasha Darke: “Running to Sanctum Cay – whisper me please.”

Passing Warrior: “OMG! You’re Tasha Darke, from that Tyria’s Next Top Superstar thing! Can’t wait to tell my friends back home that I met you! Where are you from?”

Caption Two:

Tasha Darke: “…Ascalon… Hang on, you aren’t in the movie!”

Passing Warrior: “No way! I’m from Ascalon too. Well Istan actually but that’s only a boat trip and a run away. We should so go out, pleaaase.”

Caption Three:

Tasha Darke: “…Security!”

Judges Comments:

Judge One:Someones got a big head already I see? Heh, don't expect to get fame this early into contest, or else you will be heartbroken. Your comedy comic has an overall good idea to it, but the execution just didn't blend together well. I personally did not laugh because the screenshots didn't work with the lines that they were givn. Especially the last frame where you used /sigh and called security. When someone calls for backup it is usually more hesitant or frightened. Using /help would of worked a lot better here.

Judge Two:There are more places then inside of towns to take your shots. It makes the armors look more appealing, instead of the rendered down look that you get in towns to decrease loading time/etc. The emotes barely matched the lines. Other emotes could have been used instead of the ones that were used. But, you should worry about them fans, they can get a bit pesky sometimes!

Judge Three:I enjoy the idea of fandom in your scene, but I felt you could have done so much more. For example, if it really was a film set, you could have added a crew (/flute can seem like a cameraman at different angles, for example). And for the security shot, instead of /sigh (that didn't make much sense to me too), you could actually capture the two security guards running towards the fan with you calling for them. Lastly, your camera angles were questionable. For your 2nd shot, you could showcase your characters frustration if we could see her frontal, and the warrior kneeling down, with its back facing the camera. It would have emphasized the fan looking up to the "star." Overall, not a bad comedy scene, but your visuals didn't do your lines justice.

Eryn Shadowbane



Judges Comments:

Judge One:I really admire your comic layout that you had. You really made sure not to edit the screenshot whats so ever, with the exception of text. Its a really cute scene and I can feel for Eryn and giggle at her conclusion of this request. Your poses work great with lines you gave your actress. Also with your text, the cursive was kind of hard to read might want to use something bigger or more open in the future.

Judge Two:The text was a bit hard to read, a more simpler font would have been a better idea. The idea though was great, amusing, and perfectly planned out. Although I do hope you washed your new "armor" after you had that around you. You never know if those "rumors" about the spectral essence are true or not.

Judge Three:First of, GREAT layout. I felt your pictures were very strong, and it would have made sense even without the lines. I also like how you emphasize your character in the shots to always show who is in charge, and who is the "star." Comically, It was clear, and I'm sure everyone has had their "GIMME ARMOR" moments. However, I did find it a little hard to read the writing, and you could have shortened a few of the lines. In comedy, the shorter the better.

Queen Kitiara



Scene One:
Queen (thought cloud) ooOOO! Mini-pet! $$$$
Queen - Well hello there little fella!
Mini Hydra - O God, what do you want!
Let me guess... Michael Vick sent you...

Scene Two:
Daddy Hydra (thought cloud) Vick sent u ??? U gonna die!!!
Mini Hydra- Helllp! Daddy, tell this idiot I am not a dog!
Queen - Get back here you little brown piece of ooOOH &%*$#!

Scene Three:
Mini Hydra - CHER called, she wants her outfit back!
(music notes) Ohhh, If you could turn back time...(music notes)
Mua ha ha haha ha haaaaw!
Queen - ZOMG BBQ! Pwnd by a mini-pet!

Judge One:Thank Dwayna that you posted who Michael Vick was in the thread or else I would be so clueless right off the bat. You did an okay job, it felt mostly like a bunch of one liners and random "leet" speak than having it all fit together. I was kind of distracted by that kind of dialogue that I couldn't see how each pose fit with each line. Its a very randomly absurd scene which would get some laughs from somewhere, but mine were more so a chuckle than anything. I really did like the Cher joke though, that make me chuckle more than anything else in your assignment.

Judge Two:I would have to agree. The "leet speak" kind of made it slightly "iffy", but it was still funny nonetheless. Oh, and I got an e-mail from Cher, she asked when you were going to give her iron thong back that you stole from her. Amusing shots, only thing I can really say to improve on is, cropping smaller shots. I know some stuff had to be in these, but a little "shrinking" of the images wouldn't hurt any.

Judge Three:Again as said before, the shorter the better! The reference to real life celebrities was witty, and the Cher thing was the funniest thing in your entire scene. I must say your lines were winded, and the l33t speak was unnecessary. l33t speak itself is fine but when you have gigantic amounts of OoooOOOoOo's or !!! ???, then it just gets boring. 3 times is the maximum amounts of times you should have used it, as the power of three works amazingly well in humor. The pictures reflected the lines well, and I like the contrast between the 1st and 3rd shot. I liked how in the 1st shot, Kiti (that will be your nickname from now on) was towering over the mini hydra, but in the last shot, it was just trampling all over Kiti.

Rosemary Marron



Judge One:xD! Your poses worked so well with your dialogue that it just worked perfectly together come out with this comedic scene. The dialogue must deserve some recognition here because you used word play so well, by using names of skills for the punchline. I love the second panel, that it still makes me giggle and you managed to top that with the third panel giving the illusion that she was punching him. Good job!

Judge Two:The punch line, is literally a punch! Bam, right in the kisser! I thought this compilation was amusing, it made me giggle, especially the last scene. Very unexpected, but nonetheless amusing, good job.

Judge Three:I really enjoyed this scene. I like how you introduced the scene like a comic strip, and it just adds an extra layer of depth without going overboard. The poses reflects the lines, and the punchline "can't touch this" is great! I LOVE that illusion of a punch in that last shot. A few things I would suggest you watch out for is armor colour matching, and background choices. The red on Rosemary is very vibrant, but almost too much so just watch out next time.

Cold Lucille



Caption One:
Lucille is enjoying the warm sunlight at Paradise Island Ld1, when the wind suddenly carries a distant.. "JOIN MY GUILD PLZ"

Caption Two:
-- "Don't you know Ld1 stands for Lucille's Private Tanning District? Get off MY Paradise Island!"
--- "AWW MAN JOIN & U BE OFISER"

Caption Three:
--"Ergh, these idiots give me grey hair.. and I'll never get a tan."
--- "HAY CHEER UP EVERY1 LETS DANCE !!"

Judges Comments:

Judge One:Haha, you get points for the weird obserdity of Koss and those ever so infamous lines of JOIN MY GUILD. I like it, its really simple and gets a laugh out of it. Also playing with the joke that your ele already has grey hair, is just pure *chuckle* from my end. Your poses are great, and you actually worked with your dialogue. And who doesn't like a mockery of guild recruitment? Get your ele to tan already, she is blinding!

Judge Two:omagawd! dancing wammo! *punt*...oh right...judging...The captions were amusing, and now we all understand why Lucille is so pale. She always has people interrupting her tanning sessions! The background is beautiful as well, it to me made it look like you stuck out well, even though it was a bright background!

Judge Three:Hahaha, this type of humor is always effective because ALL Guild Wars players can relate to it. Good choice of scenario, and just the mention of JOIN GUILD PLZ made me laugh. And your pictures are also exceptional. I mean look at that 1st shot... the contrast of the skin tone against the vegetation, the tropical sky, then the nuisance that is Koss... great shot. HOWEVER, Koss's pose isn't very "jOIN GUILZ NUB," as Koss is looking down. Overall, great first assignment, and I must commend you for working with such pale skin tone!

Emma Foxx



Panel One: Emma, “I see someone’s escaped from Dwayna’s workshop.”

Panel Two: Elf, “I think you’re a bit early for Mad King Thorn.”

Panel Three: Emma, “Oh my God I look like an oompa loompa!”

Judges Comments:

Judge One:Honestly, I didn't laugh because it took me a couple minutes to actually figure out that the elf turned her into an elf too. If that was what really happened, I don't know. It starts off okay, although it doesnt look like they are insulting each other, rather them just standing there. You need to put some action in it to emphasis the lines of dialogue. The last scene was poorly rushed and it lost its effect of the banter back and forth.

Judge Two:Oompa, Loompa, doom-pa-dee-dee
If you are wise, you'll listen to me.
The captions in these shots were to small
poses and angels could have been more on the ball.

Judge Three:I'm sure I must have said the "shorter the better" a million times, but for this, it is the exact opposite. Your lines required the audience to fill in the scenario with our own imagination. I got the scene after a few read throughs, but I felt you could have easily changed this by just adding a line or two. However, it is good you used a punchline, and the reference to Oompa Loompa's made me smile (not to mention having the Oompa Loompa song stuck in my head!) For your pictures, watch out for background, because in your 2nd shot, there is a green flag showing, and it distracted me. And for the last one, I felt the angle could have been adjusted to have more focus on you, since right now, I can only differentiate the two elves due to the poses. Oompaaaa Loooompa!

Heavenly Messanger



Judges Comments:

Judge One:Poor monk. Sadly, this gave me anything from laughter. These scenes felt to me like a story rather than an attempt at being a comedian in any sense. It was more so teaching me a moral lesson, never to be like this poor monk or else a pack of wolves will eat you. You really missed the mark here.

Judge Two:Too long. I expected funny, not a short story, where I had to read a few paragraphs to get to the "funny", which I didn't really see either. The shots though, seem to be similar to your application, somewhere in the shiverpeaks. Although they are nice backgrounds though.

Judge Three:Out of all the lines, the last panel had the best. The rabies, deep wounds, and 55 monks were really relate-able and gave vitality to an otherwise stale topic. However I must say the lines in general were a little too long. Remember, for comedy, the shorter the better. The humor in your piece is more of Guild Wars mockery instead of the actual story. Taking a look at your pictures, the background in the 1st shot is stunning! I think your shots weren't bad, but the large chunks of writing was just very detracting.



Results as to which people move on, and which person gets eliminated will come later today.

We would also like for EACH contestant to e-mail us a selection of three (3) numbers between 1 and 11, this way we can continue assignment two quicker. This needs to be done ASAP!

aaah great stuff girls! *anticipation building up*

Omg, Sue Aside's, Eryn's and Pery's shots are pure genius. I also love Alicendre's wordplay, stalkers indeed !

I had a big laugh reading all the scripts. Especially Rosemary's, I'll never see "Can't touch this !" in the same way than before...
Also I'm aware the pictures were bad. I only had 30 minutes (yay for shouting on every big city "I'm looking for a guy with a melandru's stalker"...) to take them and as such their quality was really low :/ I will try to take more time for the next application... But when you live with your parents it's not really easy to say "Mom, Dad, I can't go with you, I need to take screenshots for a game contest !" XD

PS : maybe Alice wants to be the fiancee AND the priest !
PS 2 : so when is this Stars meeting ? ^^

Didn't read everything yet, but atleast I learned something new from my critique =/. Should of cut my captions down a bit but, can't do much now.

Haha, many good laughs among these Glad to see them at last! (You all had me nervous!) Sorry for the asking of many questions but 3 numbers? Like, picking the numbers of the people we want to see through or what? -slow person on board-

No, just pick three numbers between 1-11.